John Burnett's Critques
Dustin Lieb His words all look like they have a similar font. First thing i would change is some of the word's fonts. Another thing is, i can't even read 3 of his words. They're all the same size font too, so the design looks a little crowded. I would make some words smaller and i think the design would have a lot more rhythem. Maybe instead of one big word, he could repeat that word a few times to get more repetition in the design.. I would change the word affection in the background because my eye gets kind of lost in the design and i think having that a large word in the background, it makes the design look more crowded. Affection also comes off to me as a girly word so he could maybe change the font to something more girly. Bobby Kulp First thing i notice is that the top right corner looks crowded and throws the design off balance. I would either change the word distant to a bigger font size or just have confused only repeated once or not at all. Confused gets kind of shut out too because the first thing i read is sick and tired, then i go to stressed, then to distant and then my eyes just kind of stop. I would maybe put confused in a different stop to help the rhythem of the design. The fonts also take up most of the negative space in the design which almost makes it look a little crowded, so he could change some of the font sizes to keep everything at a better scale. I would change confused because the way he has it in the design doesnt define the meaning of confused. Maybe he could change that font so it has some letters backwards like in stressed, because that makes the word a little more "confusing." Bobby-Jo I'm not really sure what her focul point is so i would change some of the font sizes so theyre not all the same size. The design doesn't give much of a visual flow either. Changing the positioning of the words could solve that problem. The design could show more proximity too, all of the words are just kind of laid out in no specific order. I would change the word confident to instead of having it drooped down, but have it puffed up and to show the word is confident in itself. Karrah Pfeiffer Her focul point is Quiet, but from there i go to loving. i would put quiet more at the bottom and having loving on top because that would give the design more rhythem when looking at the words. The way it is now, after loving my eye goes off the page. She could also change loving to a different font and maybe put it as red, when i think of love..i think hearts...hearts are red...loving should be red and maybe a more friendly font rather than a serious one with serifs and capitalization. I would change quiet too, it is too big to be quiet. The design looks heavy on the right side too, changing that would make it more balanced. She could change the positioning of some words to make the design have more proximity and have more variety in the design...instead of all the words reading from left to right in a straight line. David Teetsel There is too much going on in the center of the design. To scale and balance it more, i would break up some of the words and move them around. It would also create more rhythem by having your eyes move around except go straight to the center. I'm not really sure what his focul point is either, it kind of looks like all 4 words in the middle. I would change aggressive to a more stronger font and have it capitalized and maybe change the color, the way it is now...nothing looks aggressgive about it.